Short Story
Chad Bernier
Sept. 28th/10
E.L.A.
“A time I wish I could go back and do over.”
Last year about End of October we were in Leoville for volleyball regionals. Our team full of grade 12’s and other skilled players breezed through the round robin. Our first game in playoffs was against the home team Leoville. After a tough two matches we went to a third and battled hard right to the end. The game was 23 to 24, for us obviously cause were awesome. They over bumped the ball up to the net and Ashton, a grade 12 on the team, pushed the ball to the ground. The game was over everyone was screaming, we were going to provincials. After about 5 seconds the ref blew his whistle following a “lift” call.
Again everyone was screaming but this time at the ref. Everyone knew it was a wrong call, even he did, and the other ref was shaking his head. Once everything cooled down, we were too worked up and ended up losing the game. Next game was against Goodsoil, we played them once before and they were good. Again the game went to three sets. 24 to 21 was the score and we were up. We were sure we had the game, the set came up to me. It was low so I backed off and set it into the net, not over not near the top right in the middle of the net. The momentum shift started there and they started hitting and we started tipping it was not going good. They took the game 26 to 24.
I wish I could go back and put that ball to the back corner or somewhere on the floor. I wish that set could have been perfect and I could have demolished it into the ground. We had a better team than anyone there and we deserved to be in provincials. The team that won provincials, beat the team we beat in regionals no worse than we beat them. I think the best thing to do would be to let everything go about stuff like this, and don’t dwell on it. Or when you get the chance in a situation like that don’t FUDGE up!!!!!
GOOD- I think overall it makes you feel like you are in the situation.
BAD- Probably don't have the best punctuation.
Your story kept me wanting to know if you guys would win or lose so you had a good ability to keep people interested. The one thing you need to improve on is using character description. In this story in my opinion you have none.
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